Description:My goal in writing is to included some complex sentences.it came from my book in some sentences How are you trying to get better at it? I am going to add more complex sentences in my writing.
Here is the image we used for motivation:
Big idea:
Feedback/Feedforward:I like the way you did little paragraphs. Shaiv.
Next time don't do the image to big. Ok. Shaiv.
Evaluation: Thanks for the feedback and feedforward shaiv I like how I put in paragraphs but I think I could of put more writing in m y story it would of made it more fun.
Jake it is great to see you evaluate your own writing and be honest with yourself about adding more detail. My advice is to just add a bit more oompf to your sentences as that will lift the quality of them (e.g had a big party could become an enormous party with everyone I knew there...)
ReplyDeleteJake, adding those $100 words would help create a more interesting story but we still enjoyed your ideas :) this picture is fascinating!! Schools of fish can be very interesting and beautiful, Mum x
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