Tuesday 17 November 2015

Free verse writing

Publish piece:
I wake up, 
I have awoken,
awoken in a cold cold bed.
Where am I? Mum, dad and my sister are all here.
I’m safe,
But the pain,
Pain so much of it.
I see lots of machines,
machines everywhere all around me.
I have the thing that I had in my mouth at the start. 
I get taken to another room with a bed right near the door,
I go next to the window,
a big window the sun is shining in.
the machines are back.

Evaluation:

1) I used the 5 senses, (feel,hear,see,taste,smell) I think I used all of them.

2)I used visual imagery  

3)I think next time I would put a bit more detail.

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